Leonardo Barthelmeu (NF)

[candrac]

Name: Leonardo Barthelmeu

Image:

Nicknames: Leo

Age: 899

Gender: Male

Sexuality: Bi-sexual

Orientation: Master

Marital Status: Single

Social Class: Citizen

In Hiding: No

Occupation: NON EMPLOYED

Father's Name: Hail Barthelmeu (Deceased)

Mother's Name: Georgia Barthelmeu(Deceased)

Siblings: Phil (deceased)
Siren (Deceased)
Liken (deceased)
Cathren (deceased)
Alison (deceased)
Matthew (decesed)

Extended Family: NONE

Strengths/Skills/Talents: Extremely fast; stronger than normal; can think clearly; has a photographic memory; speaks only from the cold, dead heart in his chest

Weaknesses/Flaws: sun, holy-water, stakes, crosses; Hardly keeps himself from running into the night, and has one flaw that he will not speak of

Personality: Leo is quite an arrogant little shit, and hardly ever thinks about everyone else. He keeps to himself, solitary. Leo doesn't hate many people, just shows that he does. It takes a while for him to trust anyone else......if he tries.

Likes: The Dark; The Quiet

Dislikes: The Sun; The Loud

Allegience: NONE

Bloodline: Morte de Amor

Appearance: Ah, but the michevious monster is pale (as most Vampires should be), and his eyes are a deep gold. Leo has hair of dark chocolate, and the build of a lean track runner.

Time: Since the year of 1120

History:

'Dark, blood red eyes watched through the darkness, searching for prey. The lone vampire crouched in the shadows of the alley, watching the midnight walkers. One boy caught his eye, and he pounced. The boy yelled, just barely over the age of 21.
"What do you want?" the tall, built male asked.
"I want you, Leonardo Barthelmeu" the heavy blood-leech hissed, his teeth just inches away from Leonardo's neck. Passers by screamed as they ran down the sidewalk, though the vampire paid no intention to them. He just hissed, sinking his teeth into his prey's soft flesh.
The Vampires head lashed backwards as somthing collided with loud THUD. A tall, lanky man stood there with a baseball bat, just towering over Leo's trembling body.
Leo's eyes grew red, his skin growing pale, and his teeth ivory white. He jumped to his feet, his body trembling with the fire within, and he hissed at the armed intruder before racing into the night.'

Roleplaying Sample:

Chocolate Brown hair swayed lightly in the breeze, caramel eyes scanning the areas around him. His head jerked to the side, just as movement from a bush caught his eye. The male figure crouched even lower to the ground, springing into the darkness of the leaves. A yowl sounded through the air before it was quickly silenced. The echo rang through the clearing. Tearing sounds tore through the quiet. The form stood, crimson liquid dripping from his face.
'I am Leonardo Barthelmeu, mighty lone Vampire. Watch for me, you will be next' he snarled, wiping the blood from his mouth. Leo started off at a brisk jog through the overgrowth before transitioning into a swift run.

Other: None

OOC Name: Fang; Leo

Experiance: As long as I can Remember

Secret Words: dizzy

[``Constantine]

This is looking good, so far. However, being the annoying admin that I am, I must point out the few flaws in this biography that need to be adjusted.

• Leo is a vampire - a very old one, at that. The old vampires generally don't have a last last (yes, Henry Fitzroy is the exception to the rule;; bloody royalty). This means that he would not have a last name.
  
• If Leo is not going to belong to the Kiss of St. Kieran, then I need for you to state (in Other) why Leo is in St. Kieran.
  
• I fail to see how speaks only from the cold, dead heart in his chest is a strength, talent, or skill; it strikes me more as a thing that one might place in a personality.
  
• The personality needs to be longer, and more complete.
  
• The history is very short, 166 words to the allotted 300 word minemum. Also, it is not very detailed - we'd like to know what he did in his life.
  
• The role play sample is not something that you are supposed to just make up on the spot - it's supposed to be a place to show off your best role play to date. As for this one, it falls just short of the required length.
  
• I know that this wasn't on the bio format when you created this bio (my fault - I'm lazy and took too long in putting it in) but we'd also like to know the character's Date of Birth;; this can go right above Age and right below Nicknames. Because he is a vampire, you do not need to do the day, month, and year - the exact year would do, as well as the general time of year that he was born in (Spring, fall, winter, etc, that sort of thing.)
  
• I know that this might be a little bit confusing, but there are two secret words - both of which can be found in the rules.

Thank you for creating Leo, and keep up the great work. =)
Signed,
Breezy

[candrac]

I know, I added some things in there to see how they would look, but I'm not finished with the Bio. That's why there's a NF in the title.

[``Constantine]

I did see the NF;;

I would also like to say that and has one flaw that he will not speak of is not going to work - you must state the flaw so that we know what it is, and, then after it (or in OTHER) state that he prefers not to speak of the flaw.

[candrac]

Nevermind, Breezy. Just forget about it. I can't do this anymore

[``Constantine]

Oh, Fang;; I'm really really really really really sorry for being a callous, pompous, retarded, foolish, abstracted, demented, idiotic, brain-dead ass - please don't leave forever!

As I said in the chat box when I read your message:

Fang - I'm sorry that you feel that I am rushing you - I did not set a time limit, and I do understand that you are still working on it;; I was merely pointing out that what you did have put in...

I do believe that I just had one of those ah ha! moments - that's just it, isn't? I'm being my usually arrogant imperious self, and am not heeding the subtle hints that are given to me;;

What needs to be done when I get like this is you need to be firm with me - I have a hard time with grasping that sometimes I have absolutely no people skills what so ever, and I need people to push and shove me when I start acting like a pompous ass as is sometimes my wont;; you really can't be nice and polite to me when I get like this....

And I mean every word of it! You have dogs, right? And when they do something that is bad, you discipline them, right? So think of me as a sort of really unruly dog!
Please! Don't leave!